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  • Looking For Feedback On A First Impressions

    I'm looking for some feedback for a first impressions I wrote about the ARPG Victor Vran for my MINDS channel that I will be making in to a video fairly soon. Anybody down for helping me grow as a journalist/writer/youtuber?

    https://www.minds.com/aus741/blog/vi...38241913946112

  • #2
    Your impressions are good, you described the game very well. I never heard of this game before, but had no problem understanding what you were talking about.

    You might want to keep an eye on the grammar, though. You ate a lot of commas.
    "Without Games, Life would be a Mistake" - All of the Founding Fathers, in unison.

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    • aus741
      aus741 commented
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      I'll keep that in mind, thanks

    • aus741
      aus741 commented
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      Also if you're interested in seeing what Victor Vran is like, you can get a Steam key off G2A for round $1.50 AUD.

      PS: I am not a paid shill. I'm just letting you know

    • Thomas_JCG
      Thomas_JCG commented
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      Thanks, but as TelperionST advises, don't recommend G2A, they have a bad history. For key resellers, GMG and Humble are always trustworthy and always have good prices.

  • #3
    The banner image looks good and grabbed my interest immediately. Paragraphs are of suitable length with enough pictures in-between to make reading the text easier. I appreciate the gap between the third and fourth paragraphs. Like Thomas_JCG said you should pay more attention to grammar. The first sentence of the first paragraph is cumbersome to read, which is not a great way to start. If you want to read a concise and informative book on the topic, I would recommend The Trivium: The Liberal Arts of Logic, Grammar, and Rhetoric by Sister Miriam Joseph.

    I'm not sure, if it's a good idea to start your first impressions by spending most of the first paragraph talking about a different game. I do understand that you want to capitalize on recent controversy to boost reader interest, but that can also be seen as a negative. I would advise you to thread carefully.

    Overall, I think you did a good job. This game clearly lacks the depth and polish of the Diablo-series, but isn't a bad attempt at an ARPG. Personally I would recommend Torchlight and Torchlight II, over this title, but those are slightly older games. The game is very reasonably priced for what's on offer here, but I would suggest that you don't recommend G2A. If you buy their Steam keys you might end up losing your game and not getting a refund, when Steam steps in due to questionable business practices.

    I also appreciate that you showed how many hours you have put into the game before writing your first impressions. That's valuable information.

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    • aus741
      aus741 commented
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      I live in Australia and we have to pay $90 for the Resident Evil 2 remake on Steam at full price. So for us G2A is just as valid a source for PC game keys as Humble Bundle, which is how I got my copy of Vran alongside some other titles.

      Anyway thanks for the feedback. Just what I was looking for
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